Max Power draft

New bit of work here. Max Power. After sticking it up, I'm already makaing edits. Don't normally stick drafts up, but I realsied recently that in many ways I'm pretty bad for getting into lazy habbits and not wantning to chanage anything. So, here it is in raw form;

Max Power

Friday night

10:45  

A quiet country lane.

2 windscreen wipers dance 

2 young males get out the car and survey the scene 

A brand new blue fiat punto,

Crashed into a tree.

Max Power sticker on the back window.

Bumper hanging off,

Number plate dangling like a partially severed limb

There on the corner of the road,

On a windy country lane

unaware of the police cars approach

 Half a mile away

6 o clock that evening and I'm at home. 

Responding to a text from my best friend Rich

Telling him that I'm not coming out to the pub. 

Instead I'm gonna meet Mo and the other boys for a smoke.

They don't like Richard, and

I think Richard knows. 

7 o lock that evening and I'm sitting with Rich in the crown.

6.45 Richard pulled up outside my house.

Brand new blue fiat pinto,

Max Power logo on the back window.

Garage pumping 

1 pint won't hurt he says.

I coudkant say no

He wheel spins out my drive way

And minutes later were in the crown

He's new girlfriend clarissa is there.

She's the best freind of his ex girlfriend Gemma. 

The ex he said he was engaged too,

the 3^rd engagement in the space of a year

never any sign of a ring though

Gemma's now going out with his Richards new mate Tony 

Tony and Gemma are sat next to Richard and clarissA

And I'm in the middle of

What appears to be a poor im imitation of hollyoaks 

Taking big sips on a pint of carling 

Which goes down my gullet like a Brillo pad scraping  the back of my throat 

I figure the quicker I can get to the bottom Iof my pint

The quicker I can go.

7:15 pm

Richard and Tony are talking cars.

Clalirssa and Gemma are sat either side

like two queens lining up on a chess board

looking bored

Mo texts me and asks me where I am 

Half an hour away I say

The boys are in the usual place 

A little country lane behind some fields

Right at the back of town 

And away from the crowds

7:30 pm,

I just get to the dreg sin my pint  and Tony shoots up and says my round 

Shit, he’s quick

Before I can even say na I'm alright Tony he's at the bad rordering another round

I look at Richard and I can see he's ignoring me whilst he plays with Clarissa's hair 

8:45 and I’m still there

3^rd pint in and I'm starting to think actualy this aint all that bad

Clarrisa's cousin Alice has arrived,

and Rich punched me in the thigh lifitng

his eyebrowa  nodding his head

when got he up to go the bar.

I've got 2 missed calls from Mo

when Rich retunes to hand me pint number 4

10:pm and Aclice has left to

go and meet her boyfreind,

Rich says he forgot to mention she was taken

how convenient I'm thinking

outside Tony and Gemma Are arguing

Gemma reckons Tony’s flirting or something

10:30 I text Mo and say im about to leave

I tell Rich Im gonna get a taxi

when outside I hear a scream

as Tony is trying to separate Clarisa from scratching Gemma

and Gemma from scartching Clairrsa

Richard goes flying out and someone gets a called a bitch

then Tony wacks Richard in the face,

Clarrisa storms off

I grab Richard round the waist and march him to his car

With him still facing Tony and Gemma

Arms out wide hurling abuse

We get in his car and he says take me to Mo

I need a spliff

before I know it he's wheel spinned out the car park

blasting out genius crew

and im thinking don’t blas genius crew

you look like a dick

whilst im frantically starping in my seat belt.

Bititng my lip

Rich is driving like a prick,

right up the arse of a car in front,

slow down bruv I say

theres no need for that

he ignors me and just turns up the music louder

which is all trebble and little bass

Says he fitted the sound system himself

And I think yea mate I can tell

we clear the traffic in town,

through the neighboureds and out into the fields round the back

'Rich the bend is just coming up, slow down bruv your gonna miss it.'

'Shut up I know what im doing'

'slow down your gonna miss it'

'I said the shut the fuck BOSH!'

10:45 pm. Friday night

2 windscreen wipers dance 

me and Rich stumble out the car and survey the scene 

His brand new blue fiat punto,

Crashed into a tree.

Bumper hanging off,

Number plate dangling like a partially severed limb

Right There on the corner of the road,

On a that windy country lane

I phone Mo and tell him im with Rich

and that were gonna need a tug

Marc pauses, tuts

and I hear him mumble 'for fucks sake'

then says he's on his way.

I turn back to my mate Rich,

and think mate?

Why am I still mates with you\?

In the distance I see a blue light

I look at him looking at his car,

Max power sticker on the back window

 and think

maybe, just maybe,

when the smoke goes,

 this might just be a good thing.

©Paul 2015